My review, your song.
String of words and phrases using FLs synthetic speech preset robot, and milk-toast.
While its arguable the choice of words and phrases are some artiscic criticism of media and materialistic beings. (Or w/e wackey angle might be argued).
This just isn't likeable, (traditional) music, and nor does it sound like more then 2 minutes worth of effort whent into it.
1/5 1/10
Thank you for demoralizing a couple of little kids. Have fun with that life of yours.
My review, your song.
Often at night I sit and review some songs. I've just witnessed 3 spam songs, and 2 awful loops shorter then 10 seconds. Prepare to be receive praise for reminding me not everyone has the capability of writing music (though I'm still a critical bastard).
First off, your song title isn't capitalized, and punctuation in a song title looks silly. Its a step away from professionalism, and you aren't Prince, so you don't get to do things like that unexplained.
Opening synth and bass line are quite neat sounding. Sounds like vanguard synths.
Drums enter with an on beat kick/clap. Very simple drums, but it 'works'. Drums mix sounds like they've been volume boosted with maybe a bit of EQ. Not flawless, but they certainly don't sound flat. This is overall good.
0:28 secondary vanguard preset synth comes in playing notes perfectly on beat. At this point I'm noticing a trend, everything falls directly on beat.
Bass is playing a mimic of melody with a 1 octave arp. Very simple, subtle variation will make it go much further.
0:54 good spot for a bridge / mixup. Drums could have played some other pattern here to good effect.
1:24 synth re-enry. Loving its sound, its melody not so much.
1:36 returns to what would be the 'chorus' of the song. As you suggested the song is repetitive. I'd recomend you think of a typical pop songs structure when writing music. While you won't be writing pop yourself, the general shape of bridge to chorus is a good song setup, as well as really easy to do.
So in this song, if you took your bass section in the middle, played some alternative melody there, when the song returned to the 'chorus' it wouldn't feel as repetitive.
You need to do some more drum patterns, have a few drum fills, varied beats. Not even something super fancy, just something to help break the monotony of it.
Not 100% sure what your comment is about when you say used a clip from a youtube video. I'm guessing you transposed what they wrote into your session file. Frankly thats a poor way of writing music, since like 99.99% of youtube vids of FL either do things inefficiently, write poorly, write basic music, or are just wankers of some sort. Anyways... The melodies and bass line are alright, they ar exceptionatly simple. Their major draw back is the perfect on-beat-ed-ness of this. Gets this kind of punchy feel to it where its like a rhythmic skull drill (the unpleasant kind).
To avoid that, simply making some notes play on the beat and off the beat will help create a new rythm. Or just shift some notes over an 8th note. Turn the 4th notes into 16th notes, something once every 2 bars would be enough to break the flawlessness of the unbeat metronome.
And thats probably enough for this review.
Overall, don't worry about mixing for now, worry about song structure, melody writing, rythm diversity, and percussion variation.
3/5 7/10
wow first long crit review :D thanks a lot ill be sure to use everything you suggested in making music a little better. I tried mixing to make it sound a little better than the original but ill be sure to make better melodies and work on the drums oh and for the title lol yea i didnt know what to put . it was the last thing my buddy send me on msn so i put that haha
My review, your song.
Intro with some heavy distorted drums, I'm happy so far.
Lo-fi bass at 0:10, still liking. Mix is alright, not noticing any serious clipping issues or unintentional distortion.
0:28 Higher synth addition, songs building nicely.
0:36 Guitars lo-fi, not a sound I like, but it fits pretty well in this song.
1:03 nice minimalist section here, this songs progressing quite nicely.
1:20 Lead guitar and bass guitar I think hit some discordant notes, unsure if thats mistakes, intentional or not, but it simply didn't sound too goo to me.
The pure synth around 1:50 has a very nice contrasting clearness to it. Explosive drums maintain my interest.
Outro is simple but evident, and the song loops well.
Of the four songs you have uploaded, this ones my favorite of them, as well as the most original / best done. Hope you continue in this direction.
4/5 8/10
I know you probably hear this a lot, but thank you for the great review. Really. Couldn't be more helpful to me as a newbie.
I appreciate it.
My review, your song.
Well this sounds like a midi rip, song mashup, and looped.
Mix is sloppy, its all just one amalgamated mesh of noise. Make bass have more bass, raise leads higher freqs.
Take advantage of panning on drums and the little SFX blips (first heard at the very beginning of the song).
The blips I found got rather annoying, either change them to play more on key, else make their volume lowered.
Song lacks an ending, it just loops 3 or so times then fades out.
Should have made this a play through once loop.
Its not poorly setup, but if your going to midi rip these sort of songs, the remix should atleast be something new or worthwhile listening to. There are hundreds of these already, and their pretty talentless to do. I simply can't give it good scores.
1/5 3/10
I understand were your comming from im still learning how to make this stuff better and only posting just to so my small improvments that's all thank for your review I will try alot harder from now on
My review, your song.
Intro to 0:44 is good.
0:45 choir aahs are added. I found them a bit breif and backgroundy.
Ahh become sustanined at 0:56, piano added. Building nicely.
1:05 guitar is added and piano begins playing all over (in a workable music kind of way).
1:35 piano scale should have adapted abit better to the music I think. The setup is great, but the notes themselves repeating the same few note scale could have been transposed up and down to fit better.
2:00-ish guitars back doing a rythmic grunge background thing - it works.
2:30 Drums are becoming very background noise at this point in time. Just constant hammering of the kick with the only detailings being snares. Or atleast thats how it feels.
2:55 rev-pickup effect is nice, makes the shift to the next section of the song quite dandy.
3:19 introduction of a new guitar riff, drums show some more diversity here in terms of hits/sounds used.
3:51 high contrast light section, I felt some indication it was going to pasue from the metal section would have done well there.
4:00-ish soft strings / guitar gets woventogether quite nicely.
4:15 piano is added to the mix, works well. Piano plays nothing too solidly attached to the music. It feels like its wandering.
4:50 piano bridge I feel could have lasted longer for good effect. It made a nice break and contrast from the drums thrashy pace.
5:30 Mesh of strings and guitar becomes abit more complex melody-acompaniment wise. I like this section.
6:00 Still liking, drums build nicely here.
Choir sound is adding well.
6:25 guitar fades in and out very briefly, had a nice effect, felt a bit like someone taking ina breath at the endo f a sentence.
6:50 strings get discordant, I think had they continued to get louder and louder, the synth section could have been introduced in a much more dynamic way. As is, it just kind of is tacked on. I feel it could have built up more.
7:30-ish strings / guitar plays out.
8:05-End, song just dithers out, it didn't have much of a proper ending. I think a reintroduction of the acoustic guitar used in the opening alongside drums/strings/synth could have just built up to a b ig bang. Or alternatively, just have the acoustic play the song off.
Over all, mix is quite good, FX are subtle but help move the song along, writing changes often enough that repetition isn't a great concern.
Drums could use a bit more diversity in terms of pacing, as well as perhaps a greater set of durm sounds used so progressive layering could have more possibilities.
Some of the song transitions could have been built up a bit better I think too.
Pleased to have picked this as a song to review, and I'm pleased to see a decent song of hardy length on NG.
Continue as your doing. :)
5/5 9/10
This is quite possibly the most in-depth and detailed review I've ever been given, thanks man!
My review, your song.
Mix is above average for here on NG, sounds are fine, drums are 2step-y with the hats droning.
Drums could use some diversity.
Effects were unique.
Song at like 0:08 starts up and is very different then what hte intro lead me to believe.
Begins building, at like 0:25 it changes again.
The song simply changes too much, it ruins the flow and build of the song, and its not like "Whoa cool is all over the place." Cause its just all over the place.
Make the song longer, and give the listener a bit more of a chance to listen to things play out.
Sounds like it could be a great start.
3/5 6/10
ty for the review now that ive read it i realize what you mean i plan to make a longer version and ill keep what you said in mind
-01glitch01
My review, your song.
I like the use of the samples, and I'm in total agreement with your autho comments. (Which I wonder if they are in total agreement with my prior reviews.)
Your mixing needs work, I think the drums shouldn't have been drowned out by the main lead synth.
Also, your FL is showing with the sytrus Acid sound there.
If you need help with FL technicalities, or specifics as to what you need to look into, don't hesitate to PM me.
Song loops well enough.
3/5 6/10
Well Hell and O there!
Thanks for liking the 'just' of my songs. I know more drums would be beddar, but i am having the hardest time with making drum samples that i like. it's a pain. =P I'll get it though. no biggy, i just get bored with tryng to pump things out that i dont really like.. like drums. i usually go for the more creepy, wonderous, mysterious, 'hey what's this?" kind of sound. and then i turn that into a happy or mindfucking audio doodle. it's just too bad that i don't have all the time i want to work on music. =P All the more reason to start on something and just add to it every day until it's done. i'm a single mom, and choosing to spend the time that i do get to myself on making music can get a lil weird after a bit. I have soooo much to do all the time.. and i'm spending it making pointless music on my laptop?! it's an adiction i suppose. I've been at it since 2006. i should be WAYYY better. and i would prolly be better if I didnt move to 4 different states in the past 3 years with a 3 year old. for now we just use my music to listen to while we draw. my boyfriend is an artist and writer for Zomboid Comics Presents! They love having music to 'Art Jam' to. ^.^
http://www.zomboid-comics.com/
thanks for all of you comments. apprecciate ya! If i have some extra time and wanna have a few random questions answered, i'll shoot you a pm.
-amandacon superion-
My review, your song.
So I'm picking up a trend of dark in sound (Sad/mysterious/lonely those sort of 'emotions'), minimalistic, short, discordant loops.
You nearly always intro on a pad-like synth, add a simple accompaniment, whether its an additional lead, or bass, that seems 50-50ish.
Often some minimalistic drums come in which will switch on and off about 2-4 times in a minute of song time.
Minute song time seems to be your reigning average length. There are of course exceptions, but of the 15 or so songs I checked out, only 2 were greatly over a minute.
The pixel-grinding sound in here made for a nice contrast.
Most of your songs have very little progression and are just kind of whispy and directionless.
Also you drum tracks tend to be more ambient in nature then percussion that really adds to the song.
I think instead of working on making a song a day, or in one sitting, you should work towards making a longer more coherent piece, and develop a more intricate writing style. Your submissions from nearly 2 years ago don't vary too much from the ones you are submitting now. (Obviously theres been improvement, but in writing style not a ton.)
I do however like your choice of instrumentation quite a lot, the sounds used always fit together, and despite being primarily FL presets, does not stand out as such.
3/5 5/10
Well, it sounds like you know me!
or that you listened to my music. ^.^
so yes, i will take into consideration the fact that i need to stop being so impatient and work on one song over a longer period of time.
Although I like what I can come up with in 30 minutes.. i'm sure it would be a bit more rewarding to have a song that sounds great that others will want to also want to enjoy.
I really need to get better and 'drumming it up'.
my drums suck..... wah.
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