InvisibleObserver's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

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My review, your song.

Just to add a bit of logic to your day, anyone who's going to drop a vote without listening to the song is likely not to read your grammatically lacking user comments either.

Enters in on a lo-fi synth. Liking the sound choices so far.

0:20 gurgly voice comes in. Still liking.

0:33 sweepy thing, not liking it as much.

0:40 vocals don't fit the time sig or rythmn at all.

1:00 songs 'focus/chorus' plays. Its pretty decent, the main melody synth sounds like its playing a bit whimsically. It could be EQ'd to be a bit louder/higher freq boosted. Maybe some additional stereo.

1:25~ vocals in that section fit better, its less noticable they aren't on beat, and they fill out the song.

2:05 outro is alright, pretty simple. I think the song could have been longer, especially given the trance/dance nature of this song.

However, good of you not to make 2 minutes worth of music drone on for 6.

Best of luck in the competition.

3/5 7/10

[Feel Fine (Remix)]

My review, your song.

Intro is typical rev cymbals. Could be smoothened up abit.

Cheering sample = just a bad move. It detracts from the song.

The lyrics sound like I'm playing Animal Crossing. I didn't like that game. Also the words themselves are irrelevant to like 99.9% of our lives. We aren't all Mario, so we don't "Fight fight for you".

~0:40 synths used are nice, bass could do with some work in terms of rythm, perhaps a bass fill where it plays something other then a straight up 4/4 off beat bass tone.

0:58 piano sound is in the background, I think it should have been brought to the forefront.

1:30 Bridge is nice, a simple melody like this could play into just about anything, instead of reverting back into the chorus.

1:58 - See comment #2 of mine.

2:30 back into the trance/dance/hardstyle chorus.

2:55 Vocals back.

3:08 I don't feel love in the air, and I doubt I'll get much after I'm done this review from you. Sad face.

3:20 I think the vocal could have wigged out there in a socially acceptable way.

Song faded out, not a strong outro, but it works.

3/5 7/10

I find it funny you faved me as an artist. Your music is an adequate anti-me.

BassShockerzMusic responds:

Thank you again for detailed feedback.
I apreciate artists if they are good, even if the music is not my style. If it's good, I respect. Your music sounds good to me, so a favourite was in order!

[If I Could Be You (Remix)]

My review, your song.

Beginning has a nice lo-fi sound to it.

The tune has me worried a lot of the son is going to play the same melody transposed up/down a note or two.

The female cut voice is neat, and pretty well done.

0:45 nice switch over to clean vocals. I think the voice could be EQ'd to raise high end a bit more, give it more clarity.

1:11 Cheering sounds are the devil, they take away from the song, they sound stupid, and are a silly nomage to "Worship the DJ" which in thise case is a closet producer by the looks of it. Cheering = bad.

1:50 little high freq on vocals works nicely here, sounds as if an additional filter is applied.

2:20 piano bridge is well placed.

2:30 Drums maintain their samedness as the rest of the song. More work on drums and making them interesting instead of lame punctuation-esque drums will make your song alot more interesting.

3:20 is vocal chorus #2, and cheering again.

Still a minute 30 to go, my concern for the songs well being is that no other tricks will be pulled, just a simple repeat, since it sounds like it so far.

4:20 Expectations proving true.

Piano outro worked. Not super complex or anything, but it did the job.

Overall, good mix, bit on the repetitive side, but it does bridge and have a few alternate melodies.

I think drums, high freqs and general progression are what you need to work on for this song, and probably other songs as well.

And no cheering samples.

4/5 8/10

BassShockerzMusic responds:

Thank you for your detailed feedback. I'll try and work on all these things~
And I always like using cheering samples on parts I feel sound a little empty, but I suppose it's just my own opinion.

[Elements (Orginal Song)]

My review, your song.

"Original song" I should hope so?

"Elements" is kind of a boring title too granted its excessively cliche.

Song comes in 4/4 beat, synths progressively add up with the kicks and whatnot fading out once in a while.

At 1:30 another notable drop out, more cymbals. Bit of synth automation. First major change in progresion. Sort of just broke down what was built up, to build up something else. Ruins the flow personally.

2:05 some reversed sound, decent pad-strings. The cymbal needs more working in, it stands out in a sort of poor way like it isn't part of the songs instrument set.

2:45 plucked sounding lead is a pretty neat sound, plays a slow melody, hopefully it elaborates.

3:10 synths from earier come back in, still building up.

Beats continue to fall exactly on beat, non stop, all the time. The rolls are linear in that aspect to. They could be mixed up to add a lot more to the song.

Melody stays the same/simple.

4:05 Melody remains staying simple.

4:25 little bridge of sorts pops in, and the song then begins to remove layers.

I kind of felt like this song didn't go anywhere, and the outro was a boring volume ramp down. Mix is great, its mastered, sounds dandy.

Just doesn't sound like any barriers are being pushed, or any effort really excreted from the pores of your skin.

Frankly the song was boring musically, technically its pretty decent.

4/5 7/10

TerraNation responds:

Boring well na ithink its taste you not familar with uplifting trance, beside there reason i upload decent masterd version beacuse its copyrighted. Trance usely be like this people say boring but iknow whats really is boring. But glad give ur point i will check on it see what can be made of it. thanks for the review

[Orchestral Music]

My review, your song.

Song begins playing some of the choirs echo sound, its a bit odd to come in without prior sound input.

Choir and piano noises themselves are quite nice.

0:30 guitar bit should have been longer I think.

0:32 Brass is really foggy in sound and just kind of comes out of no where, but in a very bad way. Its too big of a contrast from the beginning of the song which, kind ofsounds like it has nothing to do with the rest of the song.

0:45-1:20 builds nicely.

1:20 on it slows down, sounds alright, then begins doing some random volume in out thing. Instruments do that, but not that drastically.

End 20 seconds could be cut so there isn't so much silence.

Writing is nice, mix is decent, a bit fuzzy. Instrument sounds are alright, not the most real sounding, and the writing is pretty true to an orchestral style with a few hiccups.

4/5 7/10

[Dream @ 1 am]

My review, your song.

NG does suffice for an incoherent intellectually stunted text based punching bag.

Enjoying the IDM and sounds you bring to the table.

Overall needs I think a bit of limiting on just a few sounds, there are a few sounds were some gritty noises are produced where -I'm guessing- don't belong.

Also, see about using the heavy automation to basically create new sounds that can play a melody instead of just a real vooshy synth sound. Love it when effects just become the new melody, tricky to do, but golden sound pay off.

5/5 8/10

[Grey Industry [Dispair 3]]

My reveiw, your song.

Starts off with some neat sounds playing, has me intrigued so far. Bit of resonance near the 0:08 mark on the phased warbly synth.

Drums come in, they sound great. Could use a second more clear snare I think to add in some clear rolls to a sweet effect.

0:23 bass is playing off key. Sounds a bit better when the warbly synth stops.

0:37/0:42 notes are just way off (on the bass), it sounds bad.

0:53-ish would have been a good spot for the warbly synth to play adifferent melody.

Song loops well. I felt it could have easily been longer though.

Spend more time making sure the notes being played are harmonic and congruent to a key. I'm not sure if this was intentionally dissonant or swapping between 2-3ish keys, but I do know it was this loops major bring down.

Overall mix is alright. Was somewhat quiet. (EQ/boost master mix channel)

3/5 6/10

SonicJ responds:

Ill keep the EQ in mind, thanks for the head up and review. As far as the bass, it didn't sound off to me, if anything, I intentionally made it sound the way it did. This is just a test build for a song Im still working on, so thanks for your input :p

Also, ill try a different melody for :53

[Funky Time (Loop)]

My review, your song.

Has a good sound to it, the mix is rather unpolished, it feels like there's a high pass freq filter on most of the song giving it a kind of crappy radio/speaker sound to it.

Bass is sort of fail, it doesn't compliment the song at all and its end of pattern bass fill isn't on key with the rest of the song.

Drums and melody are both simple.

Works well as a loop.

3/5 7/10

[Generic Techno Loop!]

My review, your song.

Real short, generic, and not really techno, more trance with poorly mixed drums and a preset clap.

Good job on the succesful loop though.

To be more then frank, I can't stand this type of music. In future work make sure the bass isn't just a lame mimicry of the melody with a simple arpegio. Its a good way to not set yourself apart from other artists.

3/5 6/10

chavyanu responds:

Ya it's what i was aming for. I was like damn, i bet i could make a really generic sounding loop in like 30 seconds.

Voila!

[At peace forever]

My review, your song.

Touching.

Song progression has a very evident sweep up/down build to it.

Overall .mp3 could use I think some compression and EQ just to boost the sounds a bit. It may be there, but it could be stronger.

While I understand this is made up on the spot, it is randomly flowing, theres a bit of coherance to it, but playing back into what may be a definable chorus would have made this stronger. As would a change of general tempo or key to increase the contrast within the song.

Overall quite good. I'm working on my free-playing myself and hope to acheive a level of skill such as this.

4/5 8/10

TreborLocke responds:

It is very hard to improvise and return to a chorus which is why you find so little of that happening in Jazz. I do it once in this entire improv but, it is very hidden. I just sort of went with what worked with me at the time.

As for the EQ/compression, the compression doesn't need to be fooled with....I will give this a volume boost however heh.